Holmes, T. et al
In the submission titled “Happy Birthday Mom”, the author wishes well towards their maternal figure. The submission is poorly conceived, evoking no strong emotion in the reader. The intention was half-baked, and certainly more care could have been taken in penmanship and overall quality.
The importance of the work is unclear, please add flowers.
A major concern of this submission is its novelty. There are already published works in this field
(Fischer & Fischer, 2020; Nguyen, & Nguyen, 2020; etc)
The submission does not provide the proof of recurrence of the birthday, more evidence is
needed to suggest that there is a direct relationship between birth and date and not a single
While it is understandable that quality cards are scarce, that does not excuse the need for
appropriate selection. Please find a more suitable card which excludes the glitter and bible
verses, as neither are of importance to the recipient.
Figure 1, titled “My love over time”, needs a larger sample size to determine the supposedly statistically significant increase, as stated. Please fix the axis to accurately represent the objective nature of the change.
There is a number associated with the birthdate, indicating a high age. Was this intentional? Consider revising so that the submission does not cause more harm than good.
The introduction omits a great deal of personal life updates, please include more information
on dating life (and plans for giving grandchildren), how much the throw pillows make the living room feel like a home, and an empty promise for more frequent phone calls.